Ok...
Well to be honest that was really bad. The melody (if you can call it that), wasn't interesting. It sounded out of time and distorted to the point where you couldn't hear what was going on. There was no structure to the song whatsoever. I know you may say it's Heavy Metal, but even the heaviest of metal follows the same basic principles as any other music. You need to rethink what your producing, spend a bit longer, it felt rushed and was not EQ-ed right at all. Spend a bit time learning the basic music theories/principles, and maybe try and invest in some better software.